My effort- a senryu…

I had read some senryus by Mallickji on Muse India.I had composed one senryu in a similar manner on the recent utterings by Shiv Sena against Shah Rukh Khan subsequent to his comments about Pakistani cricketers etc.Shah Rukh returned from abroad recently after promoting his latest film “My Name Is Khan” and mentioned somewhere that the matter will be sorted out over a drink with Bal Thakerey ! 

Since I am a novice in Senryus,I had requested Mallickji to polish it. He has done the needful.  

I reproduce the original senryus by Mallickji along with my senryu suitably edited by him. : 

Poetry

By Kumarendra Mallick, Feb 06, 2010
Hyderabad, kumar.muse@yahoo.com

senryu  

Mahatma…

‘stick’s to non-violence

and benign smiles

Padma awards…

lotus stems not free

of mud  

Delhi to Daulatabad…

no superfast trains for babus

to commute  

road-blocks…

roads to Rome

need quick repair  

cheer leaders…

flex muscles to cure

pins and needles  

beasts…

in the guise of fairies drive out

tiger from the woods  

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Dear Mallickji, all are exceptionally good ! Here’s my effort : = 

happy end…

spat between Thakerey and Shah Rukh

over a peg 

J S Broca, New Delhi
Feb 07, 2010 
 

Jatinder saheb, thank you for your interest, appreciation and composing one as your own (as per your request I have rearranged your words, hope you like it!). Best regards,  

Kumarendra Mallick, Hyderabad
Feb 07, 2010 

   

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